Crys To My Only Sun
Makayla Dorsey
By an arid dawn,
I watch your light through
this window pain.
Rays on display
to show you hold all
that I know, my sun.
Canvas our rooms
that hold shadows
of your manor.
Pass through our halls
with ghosts of you,
tightly pact away.
Swirl up our stairs,
find this forgiving altar,
not your cold, stiff body, my sun.
To write the poem, I would type out a word or two and if one of them had the letter “e”, then I would reword it, with a different verb or noun. Although, I couldn’t reword everything and I often relied on a homonym to replace a word that contained the letter “e”. Overall, it didn’t prove to be terribly difficult to write the poem but I didn’t have a clear idea of what I wanted to write about when I began and the content of the poem may not be entirely clear to the reader. Other than that, it proved to be a fun challenge and I now recognize how often I write with the letter “e” (and the letter “s” for this commentary).
Normally I consider e's to be more blue as letters go, more moist and bouncy, whereas a's are more red and dry. Worked out interestingly with the arid dawn and the canvas; for me that definitely changed the way I read this.
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem! It's short but very striking. I like the images of light and heat which are in contrast with the images of "shadows". Nicely done!! What was the inspiration? :)
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Wow I mean you made it sound so easy but I can't imagine writing a poem without an "e" or a paragraph without an "s" (maybe you just have natural talent, or you're hiding the fact that it was hard for you, as for good poems you're supposed to make it look like it just flowed through you and was easy, right? :p)
ReplyDeleteFor me, this problem seemed like it was definitely the hardest out of all the problems. You definitely make it sound relatively easy! I really liked your poem and how descriptive it is. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI definitely like what came from the limitations you had, the double meanings of the homonyms you chose were quite cool and there was a real puzzle-type affect that was added to the poem from that.
ReplyDeleteNice job! I liked the contrast of ghosts and sun and the movement aspect of the poem. I also like how the poem travels through the stanzas. There aren't any breaks or change of topic; rather you managed to create a really cool coherent poem. I liked your poem and congrats with the difficult task.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful and really cool poem, Makayla.
ReplyDeleteMakayla! I love this poem, what imagery, it was like walking through the house you were describing. :') your frustration seems to worth it-a keeper poem.
ReplyDeleteThis post is great! I love the imagery throughout and how the different images flow together. I love the emotion and images you were able to convey without using "e." I love the poem!
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ReplyDeleteGreat poem! If you hadn't said so in your commentary, I would never have guessed that you had to reword parts of the poem to avoid the letter "e", because the whole poem flows very smoothly. You also managed to create a lot of amazing images throughout your poem without using the letter "e", which is very impressive.
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